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Theme: Love

Immersion

A silent plea
mute acceptance
 
Living an eon
beyond the horizons
holding together
the invisible chord
of Love
 
Baring all
merging all
giving meaning
to perceptions
dreams
desires
saying nothing
hearing nothing
totally immersed
in that climax
of the sensuous
moment

When kisses
on throbbing lips
wrapped 
the orgasmic moans
into silence.  
 

03-Oct-2012

More By  :  Rajender Krishan

Views: 1451     Comments: 21

Comments on this Poem

Comment A subtle 'climax' in deed.

BS Murthy
06-Oct-2012 10:00 AM

Comment Real immersion in the fullest sense of the term.

Nalinaksha Mutsuddi
05-Oct-2012 01:53 AM

Comment Love, eternal human emotion withstanding the ravages of time, inspiring poets across the rolling centuries, from the early Greeks to Omar Khyyam to Pablo Neruda, is micro-captured by a restive Rajender Krishan, in most simple, elegant lines.
Let more LOVE flow, Amen!

sunilsharma
04-Oct-2012 12:17 PM

Comment This fantasy of what is biologically empowered for the ends of procreation is undeniably compelling; but spelt out here in the term 'orgasmic moans' it is for this end, even as mutually excperienced, and is doomed not to fulfilment but frustration. For with orgasm comes death of feeling, 'silence' in the poem, until it is regenerated once more using the biological empowerment for the specific end of procreation. As I state in the final couplet of my poem 'The Romance of Love':

the poets sin greatly not to reveal
the romance of love is children at root.






rdashby
04-Oct-2012 10:08 AM

Comment 4 October 2012
TO: Mr. Rajendar Krishan
Reading your poem I started humming a Rabindrasangeet English equivalent of which might be as follows. Do you find any rationale?
Rajat Das Gupta

To get anew again
I lose Thee now and then;
O my precious love, Thy flight
Is only to be back to my sight.

Thou art not to remain,
Endlessly behind the curtain;
Mine Thou art for ever –
Drown in the temporal for frolic mere.
On Thy search trembles my mind,
Passion waves my love thou to find.
Endless Thou art
So delude as null to covert;
Such is Thy pleasure
To leave me in desolation tear.

Rajat Das Gupta
04-Oct-2012 10:03 AM

Comment So beautiful.

Sony Dalia
04-Oct-2012 08:54 AM

Comment Just one word- LOVELY

Thanks

Santosh Mishra
04-Oct-2012 08:35 AM

Comment Lovely.

versetile
04-Oct-2012 07:52 AM

Comment
A conscise picturesque depiction of the act- good expression

Aju Mukhopadhyay
04-Oct-2012 07:21 AM

Comment In the most intense moments of ecstasy or grief, less is more, words interfere with communicating. Body has its own sacred language

A silent plea
mute acceptance

the opening lines set the mood of the theme- speaking through eyes, consent
love between two souls connected becomes a spiritual experience
The Title Immersion, is very carefully chosen - total surrender and acceptance, letting go of ego

Although the poem may seem just erotic, on second a slower reading one realizes the poet is speaking of a higher dimension.

thanks Rajender ji

mamta agarwal
04-Oct-2012 07:18 AM

Comment scintillating poem kishanji

R.Purushothamarao
04-Oct-2012 06:50 AM

Comment My God! It's hot Rajendraji!

Julia Dutta
04-Oct-2012 05:46 AM

Comment mind blowing!!

Rupradha
04-Oct-2012 04:50 AM

Comment I like it very much. You are really very good!

Antal Halmos
04-Oct-2012 02:39 AM

Comment
A good poem of Cosmic reality with spilling over passions

Madhav Sarkunde
04-Oct-2012 01:21 AM

Comment wonderful....

srikant
04-Oct-2012 00:39 AM

Comment
The idea of immersion permits Rajenderji to use his skillful word choice and command of the poetic idiom to transport the reader into an emotionally charged landscape where "kisses
on throbbing lips
wrapped
the orgasmic moans
into silence."
It is just wonderful and at the same time stands in a sharp contrast to the idea of immersion in Michele Wolf's poems entitled 'Immersion'.
In IMMERSION, Michele Wolf juxtaposes the intimate and the global in poems about adoption, identity, commitment, resilience, and the fate of our sumptuous, violent world. Rajenderji limited himself to the small contours of physical intimacy which gradually melts in an aery insubstantiality but no less profound .

Dr.Ratan Bhattacharjee
04-Oct-2012 00:12 AM

Comment Very poetic expression of a very common, well-known activity!!! BTW, getting obsessed with the topic? Just kidding!

Pavalamani Pragasam
03-Oct-2012 23:40 PM

Comment Very good composition, moments of love are as intense as those of viewing the lord in front! Lifr halts during those moents.

Kumarendra Mallick
03-Oct-2012 23:28 PM

Comment Speechless, left spellbound.

VK Joshi
03-Oct-2012 23:25 PM

Comment The most intense feeling may be felt in silence but so difficult to express in words!

TagoreBlog
03-Oct-2012 22:38 PM


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