Tunna's Cycle

by Saheli R.

Tunna's cycle was just like him,

Always chiming twoo-twoo-twim.
It was of the colour blue
Which was tunna's favourite too.
It had a seat very well designed
And was as clean as Tunna's mind.
Tunna's heavy weight it could easily bear,

With Tunna it would always be there.

But one day, sadly

It fell and broke,
And that was really not a joke.
Little Tunna cried with a heavy heart
As from his best friend he was apart.

When Tunna grew up and a job he got

A brand new cycle he quickly bought.
And...
This cycle was also just like him
Always chiming twoo-twoo-twim.
It was also of the colour blue,
And had a well designed seat too,
Tunna's heavy weight it easily bore.
And our Tunna was sad no more!

23-Apr-2011

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Comments on this Poem

Thanks a lot sir. I'm really grateful for your suggestions. Thanks for your encouragement, help, and wishes.

nameless
02-May-2011 03:25 AM

A nice children's poem overall. A little pruning and grafting could be done.... How about

"It had a seat that was well designed
And was as clean as Tunna's mind"

" But one day sadly
It fell and broke...."

Effortless flow. Keep it up. You have years before you to hone your skills further.

Ravinder Malhotra
23-Apr-2011 06:25 AM