Theme: Affair

How Silly

You’re my love tonight
you know me like your body

Will you bother to say hello tomorrow
if we meet in the street
alone like this?

Just as I like your frisette
you like my male smell,
you say. Will you clutch
my hands like this tomorrow
if I meet and say I’m hungry?

How silly, darling, go and wash,
your mouth smells of pubic hair

26-Feb-2015

More By  : Prof. Dr. Ram Krishna Singh

Views: 1399     Comments: 2

Comments on this Poem

Comment I agree with you, Bill. And, I have made the correction you have suggested. Thanks for your very empathetic reading and response.
Regards
R K

R.K.Singh
03-Mar-2015 04:26 AM

Comment The gaps that open between physical intimacy and emotional intimacy or (dare I say it?) spiritual intimacy most effectively caught. One suggestion, if I may. Line 2 is a bit awkward and open to misreading as it stands. Maybe

You're my love tonight
you knows me as you know
your body

A few more words but, as long as each one contributes, not wordier.

Bill
28-Feb-2015 11:18 AM


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