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Excellent meaningful philosophical poem . After many layers we can reach the true essence of our being. Bravo ... Pili.
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This one is indeed good. Poetry appeals better when it is evolved from concrete to abstract than the other way round . Reminded me of the famous poem by Wislawa Szymborska
quoted below
The Onion
The onion, now that's something else.
Its innards don't exist.
Nothing but pure onionhood
fills this devout onionist.
Oniony on the inside,
onionesque it appears.
It follows its own daimonion
without our human tears.
Our skin is just a coverup
for the land where none dare go,
an internal inferno,
the anathema of anatomy.
In an onion there's only onion
from its tip to its toe,
onionymous monomania,
unanimous omninudity.
At peace, of a piece,
internally at rest.
Inside it, there's a smaller one
of undiminished worth.
The second holds a third one,
the third contains a fourth.
A centripetal fugue.
Polyphony compressed.
Nature's roundest tummy,
its greatest success story,
the onion drapes itself in its
own aureoles of glory.
We hold veins, nerves, fat,
secretions' secret sections.
Not for us such idiotic
onionoid perfections.
— by Wislawa Szymborska
tr. Stanislaw Baranczak and Clare Cavanagh
from View With a Grain of Sand
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Interesting!
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Though personally don't believe in the indestructible 'atman' I like the way the idea expressed. Wonderful
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Lofty spiritual message in mundane! Elegant!
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YES......
Behind the 'ethereal- cage',
the indestructible core
ALWAYS REMAINS!
Your peeling-
many a time,
tolerating the odour and streaming tears,
is to bring out the core.
Congrats!You have brought out the core. WELL DONE.
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Beautifully expressed philosophical truth!
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Wah! wah! Rajendra ji,
I was caught in the visual because it was rather suggestive and so when I came to the end, it was a powerful wake up call!
The onion, is both a sensual object as well as spiritual and your poem illustrates it beautifully.
Julia
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11 Nov. 2012
TO: Mr. Rajender Krishan
Reminds me Tagore's following interpretation of Upanishads in his poem on prayer to the Sun-
" he who is great, sees the truth instantly beyond all impediments. That is why there is a gulf of difference between their thoughts. When everybody is in chorus that they see only darkness, he can assert- “Beyond all darkness I have seen Him who is great and luminous"-. (Upanishads)
Concluding lines of the poem-
"At your splendor’s brim
Humans sighted their nobility supreme –
That from age to age you did compile
By the Persian Gulf, Himalayas or Nile.
Said they – “Sons of the Immortal we are –
Did vision that Superman
From beyond the darkness, blazing golden.”
Rajat Das Gupta
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spiritually uplifting; as one does ones work with patience, one gains insight. Even a humble onion has vital lesson to tach, beautifully brought out in your poem. thanks
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Nice...very nice
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excellent poem
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nose tingles
