This Pain

by Dr. Jaipal Singh

This pain is an offshoot
Of your longing and loss
It's now life's integral part
So endearing to my heart.

I am now accustomed
To live ever with this pain
So my friend without this
I'd feel empty and insane.

This pain is now my
Close companion and friend
So long this pain thrives
I get a feeling I'm still alive.

03-Mar-2015

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Comments on this Poem

painful and touchy..

Rupradha
09-Mar-2015 02:18 AM

Dear Nathmal Ji, somehow I forgot that creative expression of pain can affect or impact others too while in day to day routine I avoid sharing any personal or professional pain in the surroundings.

I sincerely apologize and wish you and Boloji members a very happy and colourful Holi.

Jaipalsingh

jairathore
06-Mar-2015 00:26 AM

Dear Aparna Ji & Jaipal Singh Ji, Today on boloji screen there is a poem on"Pain" & Here it is also on "Pain".If you have to endure this perception of pain alone,then Please at least share some happiness with us all of us.For ,today is Holi.So,Happy Holi to Respected Aparna Mam & Jaipal Sahib.Thanks.

Nathmal Sharma
05-Mar-2015 09:50 AM

Dear Aparnaji,

The purpose of using 'in vain' was to make an expression of ''useless' or 'lacking worth'.

I admire time and efforts you spend on your editorial work in an endeavor to improve submissions and I would not like to suggest or do any amendment in editor's work.

Best wishes
Jaipalsingh

jairathore
04-Mar-2015 04:20 AM

Dear Jaipal Ji,

So my friend without this
I'd feel empty and in vain.

This original line of yours didn't seem grammatically right to me.

Hence, I changed it to

So my friend without this
I'd feel empty and insane.

You can see how "in vain" is used in these examples:

http://sentence.yourdictionary.com/vain

http://idioms.thefreedictionary.com/in+vain

http://www.reference.com/example-sentences/in-vain

If you still feel that you would like to stick to your original line, you can change it.

Cheers
Aparna

alwaysaparna
03-Mar-2015 14:25 PM

Dear Aparnaji,

Thanks a lot for your prompt attention and editorial contribution. However, 'in vain' was perhaps more appropriate in the 4th line of 2nd stanza in the context of what I had in mind.

jairathore
03-Mar-2015 10:11 AM

Thank you so much, Kulbirji, for being with in pain:-)

jairathore
03-Mar-2015 10:02 AM

Jaipal Sahib,

Thanks for sharing your pain with us.
Now it's not your pain - it's our pain.

Kulbir
03-Mar-2015 07:56 AM